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23 Apr 2018 2:43AM

Thanks for the feedback. I‘m glad you like it.

I should have pointed out, that she isn‘t a PROFESSIONAL sniper. She‘s just a girl with a sniper rifle, trying to survive this brutal game of life and death.

And whats wrong with the 2 hour limit? The viewers at home wouldn‘t watch a longer fight... it‘s obvious that most of the viewers would watch in order to jerk off to the sexual slaughtering and that would happen within 2 hours. And I don‘t think that the players could keep it up for more than 2 hours... plus there needs to be a realistic chance for the majority of the players to survive the game.

As for the background stories: you‘re right... there‘s a lot to be written here. For example the entire „casting“ process could be a story in itself. What would the (female) players have to endure in order to get a chance to play this game? Another aspect would be the impact on the viwers and the society as a whole.How would the viewers consume the show? Would there be „Arena of Death“ BDSM parties, where viewers could live out their violent fantasies while watching the live show? Would clever business people offer attractive female „watching companions“ (aka BDSM whores) that could be abused during the show?

And how about combining formal executions with the show? Girls on death row could be placed inside the arena for both teams to execute death sentence. The viewers could vote on the quality of the execution. Was it erotic? Was it painful and sadistic enough?

What do you think? I‘d love to brainstorm with you about those kind of plots.

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Freakyfun

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23 Apr 2018 10:52AM

Yes, I get that she's not a professional sniper but it takes some (a lot) skill and practice to be able to do what she's doing.

The only reason I didn't like the 2 hour limit was that it forces you to rush through the story is all.

Again, some background would be good here. Why would the sponsors of the show want as many of the people to survive as possible if most of them are considered human trash anyway?

And I think you're right about the basement dwellers only needing a few hours at a time to get off but if you are wanting to explore the party side of it then 2 hours is barely enough time to really get things going

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24 Apr 2018 7:19AM

Well, maybe she's just a natural... :-)

Ok, point taken regarding the rushing. To be honest I try to keep my stories short, because that's the way I like to read stories. I don't think that many people will read more than 5 minutes... for the same reason there are no 2-hour-porn movies. :-)

As for the background: I agree that it makes a story more interesting if there's some plausible background. As for the show runners: They need to make the show attractive to the contestants as well. This isn't supposed to be a pure snuff show, where the participants are human trash. The show should be seen as a sports event, where ambitious "gladiators" compete against each other, in order to see who has the skills to survive the tournament. The show should have some "stars" who the viewers can relate to... Imagine a girl who already survived 5 tournaments and got famous for her sadistic way to torture and kill opponent players. The viewers will tune in to see if she can make it a 6th time, or if she runs out of luck and the opponent's team seeks cruel revenge for their killed team members.

As for the "Arena of Death"-parties: What's stopping to organizers to hold two or three 2-hour-rounds in a row with new participants in each round? I imagined this to be multi-day-tournement... hence my referals to the day before.

But don't get me wrong: I really value your input. Do you have any further ideas? How about the "casting" process? The show runners could make a companion show, where wanna-be-gladiators have to prove in front of a live audience wether they are fit and attractive enough to take part. I could think of a couple of nasty sex-related "contests" that the female "applicunts" would have to compete in... but also the men would have to prove stamina, sexual creativity and the right amount of sadism and violence when interacting with the female candidates. What do you think?

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25 Apr 2018 1:00PM

Having different arenas going at different times makes sense. That way things could keep going in a variety of locations but people wouldn't get bored with the same scenery and contestants. It would also keep things going when the number of players got reduced and the action wasn't as frequent. Plus it would make sense in the terms of doing a 2 hour show at each location to keep things active for a T.V. program.

Not sure about how you would do "casting" as it were. I understand your thought there but nothing really springs to mind.

You should consider posting the stories on asstr.org

That would give you a better readership I think

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15 Nov 2019 2:42PM

Did u ever post anymore anywhere else?

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17 Jun 2019 8:52AM

Like all your audience participation ideas above, also perhaps people could be invited to send in their own ideas for torture and slaughter methods for the teams to use, including while the show is on - selected ideas could be broadcast live while the audience enjoys the action, so you'd hear, for example, 'After she's gangraped, let's see the cute little blonde one whipped all over with a barbed whip until her whole body is soaked in blood, then hold her wide open and slice her with a dagger up her cunt and into her womb', and the team could thrill the viewers by then enacting their wishes (obviously it would have to involve only whatever equipment is available).

Perhaps a wider range of torture methods would be good, always emphasising protracted agony, terror and suffering for the victims, and ensuring maximum viewing pleasure for the audience, but generally the fact that I had to stop myself cumming several times in order to reach the end of the action (especially during the beautiful account of the rape orgy and killing of the three girls early on) means that for me at least it's a very good story. BTW, I used the 'read aloud' function on my computer with it - can choose some pics of hot meat to imagine as victims while listening that way. And I love the sexual enjoyment Sophie gets from the violence and slaughter - my kinda gal! Thanks, looking forward to more exciting bitch killing.

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16 Jan 2023 11:38PM

I love it. Its been a few years. Have you done such a story? You should. Id love to read that and see how many target the young juicy cunts, clits explode and cunt holes get shot up to the cervix. etc.

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